Today, I plan to keep contrasting the packaging aand websites of the chocolate. Then, I plan to finish my body paragraph on the flavors and look of the chocolates.
I completed everything I hoped I would. I think I deserve 25/30 because I got distracted a lot.
Thursday, April 11, 2013
Wednesday, March 20, 2013
Blog #3 - Strategies
There were several strategies used in "No Wonder They Call Me a Bitch."
1. The difference in each dog food
2.The texture of the dog food.
3. The smell of each dog food.
4.Compares the differences of human and dog food.
5.Makes a picture in the reader's head
6.Explains the taste of each dog food
7.She acts as a critic and reviewer of dog food.
8.All the details of the dog food
9.Uses quotes from dog food professionals
10.Describes the different quality of the dog food.
1. The difference in each dog food
2.The texture of the dog food.
3. The smell of each dog food.
4.Compares the differences of human and dog food.
5.Makes a picture in the reader's head
6.Explains the taste of each dog food
7.She acts as a critic and reviewer of dog food.
8.All the details of the dog food
9.Uses quotes from dog food professionals
10.Describes the different quality of the dog food.
Blog #2 - Catchy Introductions
In my previous introduction, I wanted to get into my reader's head. I wanted to try to have the reader imagine having the same experience reading my intro. This would have the chance to catch the reader and make the paper sound interesting. I used different details and try to convey the setting. The setting is a big part in my paper because almost everyone can relate to school.
Fifth grade was one of my favorite years of school. Waking up in the spring at 7am is usually not too bad for me. The smells and brightness make it beautiful. This day however, was a Monday morning. I had awakened to my mother yelling for me to get up. I was tired from hanging out with my brother the night before. I looked outside my bedroom window and saw dark clouds and rain. The outlook on the day started out gloomy.I finally got ready and got on the bus. I hated taking the bus because I was always picked up first and dropped off last. I almost spent as much time on the bus as the driver. I didn't really have many friends on my bus either. I got to school and walked to my class. My teacher was nice but she was corny and boring. I thought we would have our usual boring lessons that I couldn't stand. I like to be interactive in class and use my hands. It all seemed like it was a regular day.
Dialouge-
"Jimmy! Are you awake? Hurry up and get ready! The bus is going to be here soon" That is not what I happen to wake up to. My mom yelling at me to get up and go to school. I never want to leave my warm and comfortable bed. I made the decision and got out of my bed. I peeked through the curtains and just saw darkness and rain falling from the sky. The words bad day kept racing through my head. ALl I wanted tot do was to fall back onto my bed and sleep. " Jimmy,lets move, you cant miss school today." " Whatever", I replied. I went to my morning routine and out into the black storm. Then I saw my bus pull up and got on. There was noone on the bus except me. I felt that I should not have awakened today.
Question-
Have you ever had a day when nothing was going your way? That's how mine began. Being awaken by mom yelling for me to get ready for school. I had been playing videogames late with my brother the night before. I didnt want to go to school so I tried to ignore her. Then again I was hit with the voice of her yelling for me again. I finally rose out of my bed and looked out the window. Darkness filled the sky and rain began to fall. I walked out of my room and did my morning routine. I hoped on the bus, drenched in water and said hello. I walked to the back of the bus and watched me leave my house. Seeing no one on the bus put a bummer on my day. That's when I knew it was going to be a rough day.
Flash/Forward-
I couldn't believe it was finally over. My stress was finally gone. I got out of the trouble with only a small punishment. My parents were still mad at me but I got over it. The summer was close and that's all that mattered.
Fifth grade was one of my favorite years of school. Waking up in the spring at 7am is usually not too bad for me. The smells and brightness make it beautiful. This day however, was a Monday morning. I had awakened to my mother yelling for me to get up. I was tired from hanging out with my brother the night before. I looked outside my bedroom window and saw dark clouds and rain. The outlook on the day started out gloomy.I finally got ready and got on the bus. I hated taking the bus because I was always picked up first and dropped off last. I almost spent as much time on the bus as the driver. I didn't really have many friends on my bus either. I got to school and walked to my class. My teacher was nice but she was corny and boring. I thought we would have our usual boring lessons that I couldn't stand. I like to be interactive in class and use my hands. It all seemed like it was a regular day.
Dialouge-
"Jimmy! Are you awake? Hurry up and get ready! The bus is going to be here soon" That is not what I happen to wake up to. My mom yelling at me to get up and go to school. I never want to leave my warm and comfortable bed. I made the decision and got out of my bed. I peeked through the curtains and just saw darkness and rain falling from the sky. The words bad day kept racing through my head. ALl I wanted tot do was to fall back onto my bed and sleep. " Jimmy,lets move, you cant miss school today." " Whatever", I replied. I went to my morning routine and out into the black storm. Then I saw my bus pull up and got on. There was noone on the bus except me. I felt that I should not have awakened today.
Question-
Have you ever had a day when nothing was going your way? That's how mine began. Being awaken by mom yelling for me to get ready for school. I had been playing videogames late with my brother the night before. I didnt want to go to school so I tried to ignore her. Then again I was hit with the voice of her yelling for me again. I finally rose out of my bed and looked out the window. Darkness filled the sky and rain began to fall. I walked out of my room and did my morning routine. I hoped on the bus, drenched in water and said hello. I walked to the back of the bus and watched me leave my house. Seeing no one on the bus put a bummer on my day. That's when I knew it was going to be a rough day.
Flash/Forward-
I couldn't believe it was finally over. My stress was finally gone. I got out of the trouble with only a small punishment. My parents were still mad at me but I got over it. The summer was close and that's all that mattered.
Wednesday, February 13, 2013
Blog #1 -- The Welcome Entry
Hi, my name is Jimmy. I like to play sports. My favorite sports teams are Tampa Bay Lightning, Boston Celtics, Atlanta Falcons and Boston Red Sox. I'm not a big fan of writing. I usually am out with friends or playing basketball. I work at the Webster Golf Course over the summer. My brother is the head professional at the course.
The focus of this blog is my writing and being able to communicate writing and stories. You can expect to see my writing pieces as well as dicussions about writing. I will put drafts and final copies of my work on here.
My strengths as a writer are coming up with ideas and being able to write short pieces quickly. Im not very good at making a thesis and writing for long periods of time. I signed up for this class beccause I want to become a better writer and not struggle writing papers in college. I hope to increase my skill and learn different techniques. Thanks for viewing my blog and hope you see my new posts..
The focus of this blog is my writing and being able to communicate writing and stories. You can expect to see my writing pieces as well as dicussions about writing. I will put drafts and final copies of my work on here.
My strengths as a writer are coming up with ideas and being able to write short pieces quickly. Im not very good at making a thesis and writing for long periods of time. I signed up for this class beccause I want to become a better writer and not struggle writing papers in college. I hope to increase my skill and learn different techniques. Thanks for viewing my blog and hope you see my new posts..
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